First the welcoming. Smiles all round.
Minor/short sentence - sounds forced business like and lacking the warmth and the familiarity - no real emotion in the greeting
A space/for handshake
enjambement - creates sense of distant and awkwardness between them - unsure whether to be formal or unformal
connotations (handshake) - formalilty
put me in my place
plosives - creates harsh bitter tone as her ambiguous comment suggests the mothers attempt to belittle her
(Oh, with concern for my comfort)
Parenthesis - adds her sarcastic comment as she is aware the mother actually cares very little for her
always his
Connotations - of possession, ownership suggests she is invading a space that isn’t her making her feel unwelcome
home/its here for him
enjambement - puts stress on her suggestion that her house is more his home than the one the couple share
Alliteration - stress that the focus is on the son and little regard is given for her
Friend
Capitalisation - puts stress in the word heavily implying it’s not a friend but other girlfriends - trying to make her insecure as if she wont last
make do tonight
connotations - of suffering through something, tolerating, settling for less - suggests the mother implying he is doing this with her too
I hope the bed is soft enough?
Rhetorical question - reflects the mother’s false concern and niceness to her
put-u-up
connotations - of makeshift, mediocre suggests the girlfriend is not of the quality he deserves
For a night or two.
Connotations - of temporary, lacking longevity suggesting the mother doesn’t think she will be around long
once or twice
connotations - of uncertainity - mother gives passive aggressive statements suggesting she in not sure of how many girls he’s brought home
It’ll all be fine I’m sure -
Dash - breaks off previous though as if she doesn’t believe her previous comment
want to wash your face
Alliteration - sounds sly and waspish as if criticising the amount of makeup or implying she is dirty
‘peace to upack’
inverted commas - suggests she doesn’t believe this was the mothers intention as she is now overthinking
(lightweight, glossy, made of some synthetic miracle)
Parenthesis/list - could reflect how she sees herself or the situation as the description is overwhelmingly fake and lacking
left alone
Connotations - of isolation, loneliness showing mothers attempts to exclude her
pathetic/shrine
Metaphor - compares his childhood objects to a place of worship showing the mothers unhealthy fixation and obsession for her son
lost boyhood
Connotations - of childish, irretrievable, desperate - shows the mother trying to cling on to the past
brush off time with dust
Metaphor - compares mother thinking she can erase the fact that her son has grown up to brushing dust away - thinks it’s a symbol that shows she is in denial
laugh it off
Connotations - of relaxed, uncaring showing she initially appears resistant and unaffected by the mothers attempts
self defence
Connotations - of fighting, resistance, agitation showing the girlfriends determination to battle with the mother
a weekend to state my permanence
contrast - stresses that while her stay is only temporary she is determined to last longer
Connotations (state) - of certainty, confidence showing girlfriends self-assurance that she can win
Peace to unpack - but I found none
Dash - reveals the truth that she is uneasy about the situation
