many people may not like the newly created taste.
the primary reason
the primary cause
the main advantages
the major advantages
the key advantages
human health ✅
human welfare ✅
human well-being ✅
human rights ✅
As these additional chemicals have their own costs, these costs may be passed on to retail prices.
the new substance may even pose a risk to people’s health.
these chemicals prolong the shelf life of food
Another major advantage is that many foods can be commercialized.
industries can benefit from these chemicals by selling a wider range of food products
the commercialization of many kinds of food
many people may not like the newly created taste.
the primary reason
the primary cause
the main advantages
the major advantages
the key advantages
human health ✅
human welfare ✅
human well-being ✅
human rights ✅
As these additional chemicals have their own costs, these costs may be passed on to retail prices.
the new substance may even pose a risk to people’s health.
these chemicals prolong the shelf life of food
Another major advantage is that many foods can be commercialized.
industries can benefit from these chemicals by selling a wider range of food products
the commercialization of many kinds of food
adding chemicals to food can alter its original taste, which many consumers may find unpleasant
foods that were once popular may lose their appeal.
additives
permitted food additives
Our products are free from artificial additives.
This makes it possible to transport food over long distances, even between continents, without spoilage.
As a result, food industries can expand their markets and increase profits by supplying preserved foods to global consumers.
adding chemicals to food can alter its original taste, which many consumers may find unpleasant
foods that were once popular may lose their appeal.
additives
permitted food additives
Our products are free from artificial additives.
This makes it possible to transport food over long distances, even between continents, without spoilage.
As a result, food industries can expand their markets and increase profits by supplying preserved foods to global consumers.
Take social media users as an example
treat
The prisoners were well treated by their guards.
Such individuals may treat people who do not use these products negatively.
People who use these products may develop negative attitudes towards those who do not, which can contribute to social division
❌ “edge toward their lifestyle” –> ✅ “gravitate towards their lifestyle”
This lifestyle is closely associated with the use of these products.
There is a significant age gap between younger and older generations.
✔ The age gap between spouses can affect communication.
…, but this trend also raises serious concerns that should not be ignored
Take social media users as an example
treat
The prisoners were well treated by their guards.
Such individuals may treat people who do not use these products negatively.
People who use these products may develop negative attitudes towards those who do not, which can contribute to social division
❌ “edge toward their lifestyle” –> ✅ “gravitate towards their lifestyle”
This lifestyle is closely associated with the use of these products.
There is a significant age gap between younger and older generations.
The age gap between spouses can affect communication.
…, but this trend also raises serious concerns that should not be ignored
Climate change & Global warming
reduce / combat / mitigate global warming
Climate change & Global warming –> without THE
reduce / combat / mitigate climate change
Also very common
tackle climate change
address climate change
✔️ “The” only when you mean a specific instance or process
The climate change we are experiencing today is alarming.
The global warming caused by industrial emissions is unprecedented.
instead of –> rather than
governments should reflect this priority in their policies and allocate a substantial share of public funds to education.
~@ share & proportion & portion & part
country’s development
countries’ development
they receive just fleeting and intangible entertainment
they are just fleeting and intangible entertainment
only temporary enjoyment
short-term pleasure rather than long-term benefits
mainly serve as a form of leisure rather than skill development.
Recreation should receive the same proportion of funding as education.
Recreational activities should receive a similar proportion of public funds.
Recreation should receive a similar proportion of funding to education
For example, a recent graduate who has not engaged in recreational activities may suffer from mental fatigue and reduced creativity.
⭐ Best (Band 7–8)
As a result, recreational activities are of particular importance.
⭐ More explicit
As a result, recreational activities play a particularly important role in promoting mental health.
⭐ Very safe and natural
Consequently, recreational activities are especially important.
a balanced approach
instead of –> rather than
governments should reflect this priority in their policies and allocate a substantial share of public funds to education.
\~@ share & proportion & portion & part
country’s development
countries’ development
they receive just fleeting and intangible entertainment
they are just fleeting and intangible entertainment
only temporary enjoyment
short-term pleasure rather than long-term benefits
mainly serve as a form of leisure rather than skill development.
Recreation should receive the same proportion of funding as education.
Recreational activities should receive a similar proportion of public funds.
Recreation should receive a similar proportion of funding to education
For example, a recent graduate who has not engaged in recreational activities may suffer from mental fatigue and reduced creativity.
⭐ Best (Band 7–8)
As a result, recreational activities are of particular importance.
⭐ More explicit
As a result, recreational activities play a particularly important role in promoting mental health.
⭐ Very safe and natural
Consequently, recreational activities are especially important.
a balanced approach
“rather than” is more formal and preferred in academic writing than instead of.
contributes to a country’s economic and social development
a country’s long-term development
Consequently, it is reasonable for governments to prioritize education in their budgetary decisions
Others argue that recreational activities, including sports, are just as important.
Others argue that recreational activities, such as sports, are equally important.
they play a vital role in maintaining people’s mental health.
contributes to a country’s economic and social development
a country’s long-term development
Consequently, it is reasonable for governments to prioritize education in their budgetary decisions
Others argue that recreational activities, including sports, are just as important.
Others argue that recreational activities, such as sports, are equally important.
they play a vital role in maintaining people’s mental health.
If they do not have enough time and can earn more than it would cost to complete these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties. –> We normally say earn more than the cost, without money.–>The main issue is “earn money more than the costs incurred” — native speakers normally compare earnings with what something costs, not with “costs incurred” in this way.
If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better that they hire someone to carry out such duties. –> Your sentence is understandable and mostly correct, but the phrase “it is better that they hire” is grammatically fine but a bit stiff and formal for natural English. Native speakers would usually say: ✅ If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
f they lack time and can earn more than they spend to have these tasks done, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
Optional Band 7–8 IELTS version (more concise and formal):
✅ If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of outsourcing these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to complete them.
If they do not have enough time and can earn more than it would cost to complete these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties. –> We normally say earn more than the cost, without money.–>The main issue is “earn money more than the costs incurred” — native speakers normally compare earnings with what something costs, not with “costs incurred” in this way.
If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better that they hire someone to carry out such duties. –> Your sentence is understandable and mostly correct, but the phrase “it is better that they hire” is grammatically fine but a bit stiff and formal for natural English. Native speakers would usually say: ✅ If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
f they lack time and can earn more than they spend to have these tasks done, it is better for them to hire someone to carry out such duties.
Optional Band 7–8 IELTS version (more concise and formal):
✅ If they lack time and can earn more than the cost of outsourcing these tasks, it is better for them to hire someone to complete them.
